I liked that your story had a very clear and discernible point. It's lamenting the loss of a childhood friend how ultimately people grow apart and can become very different. There's also some very honest self-analysis that I think really work and shows a lot of self-insight and growth. The story is obviously a memoir that covers the entirety of your relationship with Ivy and a lot of your relationship with your first boyfriend in college.
I liked the fairytale elements that you used throughout the story. I think it definitely made it your own and it was interesting to see you continue to tie it in as you get older. I also think we all have that feeling of nostalgia for when we think about the people we grew up with and are sad when we think about the way our relationships have changed. Personally I can relate a lot to this as can almost everyone I’m sure. Your relationship with Ivy is also interesting because you guys have such an animosity between you and I think that’s a rare way for things to turn out. The descriptions of playing in the woods were nicely done and made me think a lot about playing with my friends when we were little.
As far as criticisms I’m not sure if this should be longer or shorter but I think it needs to be one of the two. You cover a lot of time in your life very quickly and I think some parts either need to be expanded or you need to cut it shorter somewhere. I think it would probably be better if it was longer because all of the stuff about Ivy and your ex-boyfriend is honestly shocking. Maybe include some more information about the way your parents and you dealt with all this and how the relationships between your mothers turned out. Also I was curious about what happened with your second boyfriend. Personally, it’s also super sad and I guess was hoping for something good to happen at the end but I guess that isn’t necessarily part of nonfiction.
All in all your story is very affecting and done very well.
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